Monday, February 07, 2005
Assignment for English Comp Essay on Vegetarianism
Many people believe that eating meat is a necessary part of a nutritionally healthy diet. This is not true COMMA however. In fact, vegetarians generally have higher and more diverse nutritional intakes than others. The present availability of a wide variety of food allows vegetarians access to all the nutrition offered by meat. Beans, tofu, nuts, seeds soy, and other foods can easily be substituted for meat products. Although diets including meat usually have higher protein intakes, this comes at a high price which includes higher fat, saturated fat, and cholesterol and lower fiber intakes. In addition to other health factors, one not always discussed is that the meat industry uses chemicals in growing animals that may be very unhealthy and should be avoided altogether. THE ANIMALS MAY BE UNHEALTHY OR THE CHEMICALS ARE UNHEALTHY? UNCLEAR WORDING.
Mass production and corporate greed have lead to increasingly concentrated herds of pigs and other animals. Right now, large amounts of our lands are being destroyed and depleted of natural resources by these "factory farms". These natural resources have taken millennium to develop, but our being destroyed at an alarming rate. Animal waste causes huge fish-kills along with reducing the usability of rivers and streams. Even groundwater, which takes thousands of years to recover, is being contaminated. Large amounts of produce are being grown and used to feed animals. These factors make animal agriculture far more environmentally devastating than other agriculture.
Due to the direct and indirect costs required to raise, transport, store, and preserve meat it is expensive to buy on a regular basis. Replacing meat with other proteins (grains, legumes, milk, and eggs) saves money for vegetarians. Some rough estimates for water needs per pound of beef grown are over 100 times that of non-meat foods. Because of the health benefits of vegetarianism, it is reasonable to say that there is a reduced risk for many health related costs that may be incurred otherwise. Ongoing subsidies are given to the meat industry, taking money from other government uses. So, not only is it healthy, but it will keep money in your wallet to choose the non-meat proteins when shopping at the market. WHO IS "YOUR"? AGAIN, USE THIRD PERSON, PLEASE!
In conclusion, a vegetarian diet is healthy not only for the individual, but for society and the Earth's environments. It provides a better nutritional advantage over other diets. Vegetarianism increases the potential to be more healthy. Replacing meat saves money at the store and possibly in the long run for health costs. Even if you can't be completely vegetarian, every step in that direction helps.
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I thought it was a damn good essay, what do you think?
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Having your entire name on here would help significantly!
I assume you are Peter Newman?
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Sent: Tuesday, January 04, 2005 7:31 PM
To: Marian Leerburger
Subject: Assignment 3.2, NEWMAN, ENC102 Sep 04
Meat is a large part of the average American's diet. Partly because of this, obesity and related problems are an increasing problem in our society. People have not always been as carnivorous as we are today. Many societies have been highly agricultural and depended very little on meat. In modern times, we have the availability more than ever to "go vegetarian". Adopting and maintaining a vegetarian diet is the best eating choice for individuals and society. WHO IS "WE'? YOU CAN NOT USE SECOND PERSON IN FORMAL WRITING, BUT MUST USE THIRD PERSON.
Going vegetarian will help in countless health aspects. Because of a lower intake of fat, saturated fat, and cholesterol, it WHAT IS "IT"? MAKE SURE YOUR WORDING IS CLEAR AND AVOID UNFOCUSED WORDS. reduces the risk of heart disease. This can possibly reduce hypertension as well as other related problems. Vegetarians often are closer to desirable weights and less likely to be obese than non-vegetarians. They may also have a lower risk of non-insulin-dependent diabetes because of being leaner than their counterparts. Higher fiber intake for many vegetarians may possibly reduce the risk of certain forms of cancer. These health factors cause vegetarians to have longer lives and lower mortality rates than otherwise.
Many people believe that eating meat is a necessary part of a nutritionally healthy diet. This is not true COMMA however. In fact, vegetarians generally have higher and more diverse nutritional intakes than others. The present availability of a wide variety of food allows vegetarians access to all the nutrition offered by meat. Beans, tofu, nuts, seeds soy, and other foods can easily be substituted for meat products. Although diets including meat usually have higher protein intakes, this comes at a high price which includes higher fat, saturated fat, and cholesterol and lower fiber intakes. In addition to other health factors, one not always discussed is that the meat industry uses chemicals in growing animals that may be very unhealthy and should be avoided altogether. THE ANIMALS MAY BE UNHEALTHY OR THE CHEMICALS ARE UNHEALTHY? UNCLEAR WORDING.
Mass production and corporate greed have lead to increasingly concentrated herds of pigs and other animals. Right now, large amounts of our lands are being destroyed and depleted of natural resources by these "factory farms". These natural resources have taken millennium to develop, but our being destroyed at an alarming rate. Animal waste causes huge fish-kills along with reducing the usability of rivers and streams. Even groundwater, which takes thousands of years to recover, is being contaminated. Large amounts of produce are being grown and used to feed animals. These factors make animal agriculture far more environmentally devastating than other agriculture.
Due to the direct and indirect costs required to raise, transport, store, and preserve meat it is expensive to buy on a regular basis. Replacing meat with other proteins (grains, legumes, milk, and eggs) saves money for vegetarians. Some rough estimates for water needs per pound of beef grown are over 100 times that of non-meat foods. Because of the health benefits of vegetarianism, it is reasonable to say that there is a reduced risk for many health related costs that may be incurred otherwise. Ongoing subsidies are given to the meat industry, taking money from other government uses. So, not only is it healthy, but it will keep money in your wallet to choose the non-meat proteins when shopping at the market. WHO IS "YOUR"? AGAIN, USE THIRD PERSON, PLEASE!
In conclusion, a vegetarian diet is healthy not only for the individual, but for society and the Earth's environments. It provides a better nutritional advantage over other diets. Vegetarianism increases the potential to be more healthy. Replacing meat saves money at the store and possibly in the long run for health costs. Even if you can't be completely vegetarian, every step in that direction helps.
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GRADE: B
